Aimi Shimura

[kisaragi]

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[atrb=width,430px,true][atrb=border,0,true][atrb=style,border:5px solid #000000; background-color: #09030A; padding: 5px][style=padding-top: 4px; border-bottom: 4px #1C1C1C solid; font-family: georgia; font-style: italic; font-size: 29px; letter-spacing:-2px; color: #47314D; text-shadow:#000000 1px 1px 2px; text-align: left; text-transform: lowercase] ✧ Aimi Shimura[/style][style=background-color:#161612; border: 4px solid #1C1C1C; float: right; height: 100px; width: 100px][/style] [style=margin-top: -21px; width: 286px; background-color: #0C010F; border: 1px solid #1C1C1C; padding: 3px; font-size: 10px; color: 706673;]✄-- SUB-RACE: pure blood ✄-- AGE: 17 ✄-- BIRTH DATE: Dec, 16 ✄-- SEXUALITY: Bi-sexual ✄-- OCCUPATION: Student[/style] [style=margin-top: -20px; height: 20px; border-bottom: 2px dotted #1C1C1C; font-family: georgia; font-style: italic; font-size: 20px; letter-spacing: 2px; color:#47314D; text-shadow: #000000 1px 1px 2px; text-align: left; text-transform: lowercase]overview[/style][style=border: 1px solid #1C1C1C; background-color: #0C010F; font-size: 10px; text-align: justify; padding: 3px; color: 706673]✄-- BIRTH POWER: Chi ✄-- SUB-TYPE: Poison ✄-- POWER LEVEL: One ✄-- MAIN ATTACK POWER: Aimi is a rush down type of combatant who prefers to use her own fists, as such her strikes are quite powerful. Considering her style and power, like other Chi users will often have an advantage in close quarter fights, able to use her power to poison them. Additionally She has a bit of a mean streak in her fighting style, integrating a bit of wrestling and submission holds to better supplement her power, allowing her to slow the pace down in fights for torturous results, favoring choke holds to force her foe to breathe in her Poison Aura. ✄-- ADDITIONAL POWERS: N/A ✄-- LOVE LIFE: Aimi isn't a romantic type by any stretch. To her it's nothing more then an emotion to manipulate to get what she wants from someone. ✄-- TALENTS/HOBBIES: Napping, Wrestling ✄-- INSTRUMENTAL: She isn't the person to take an interest in music. That would cut into valuable nap time. ✄-- FACE CLAIM: Cassandra Cain (Batman Universe)[/style] [style=margin-top: -20px; height: 20px; border-bottom: 2px dotted #1C1C1C; font-family: georgia; font-style: italic; font-size: 20px; letter-spacing: 2px; color: #47314D; text-shadow:#000000 1px 1px 2px; text-align: right; text-transform: lowercase]personality[/style][style=border:1px solid #1C1C1C; background-color: #0C010F; font-size:10px; text-align: justify; padding: 3px; color: 706673; overflow: auto; height: 80px;]✄-- Aimi is a cold and calculating type of person who can also be quite manipulative. Very much like a snake she'll lie in wait and sliver into position to reap the benefits. This young woman takes pleasure in the pain and suffering of others and is often cruel. Assuming she isn't sleepy, she conducts herself in a rather collected manner, but can on occasions be excitable. As mentioned, Aimi can somewhat be gluttonous when it comes to a simple nap, one of the few luxuries she enjoys of this world. She losing quite a bit of her own sadistic motivation if she feels she's been awake for a bit too long. Naturally the young woman hates to be disturbed and woken up from her sleep. It wouldn't take much for one to have guessed that Aimi isn't the best people person. Though the young woman showcases a load of charisma, she is rather bitter and doesn't care much for society as a whole unless she is manipulating it for her own enjoyment, This could branch back to her hatred of her Father. She especially dislikes people who are far too loud and incredibly dense, the former which just annoy her, and the latter being too far less of a challenge for her. Additionally she hates cowards, the term being very broad to the likes of her, from people who simply won't cooperate with her goals out of fear or some self righteous reasoning, either way she hasn't the patience for them. Strengths Intelligent Charismatic Logical Manipulative Attentive Weaknesses Cold Doesn't Work well with groups Somewhat Arrogant If tired, loses all motivation Lacks patience with certain types of people. Likes Sleeping/Naps Anguish of Others Night (The Moon's glow, Night time Breezes) Horror (Movies/Books) Vampirism (The idea and concept, she's not going to go around drinking blood XD) Dislikes Her Father Alarm Clocks Cowardice Loud Noises Overly Dense People Fears Snakes Heights (Extreme Heights) Fire [/style] [style=margin-top: -20px; height: 20px; border-bottom: 2px dotted #1C1C1C; font-family: georgia; font-style: italic; font-size: 20px; letter-spacing: 2px; color: #47314D; text-shadow: #000000 1px 1px 2px; text-align: left; text-transform:lowercase]appearance[/style][style=border: 1px solid #1C1C1C; background-color: #0C010F; font-size: 10px; text-align: justify; padding: 3px; color: 706673; overflow: auto; height: 80px;]✄-- Starting at her body, Aimi is a pretty small girl, standing at 5'3" in height and barely weighing 115 pounds. As one would expect she has a small frame, a slender build which allows for plenty of speed in her movement and masking her power. Her facial features are as with her body, slender giving her an overall "cute" look which is a direct contrast to she herself. The young woman has Black hair which reaches just below chin level, usually kept in a bit of a messy style, though whether this is for style or the fact she just got out of bed is anyone's guess. Behind all this she has a pair of stunning dark brown eyes. Clothing wise Aimi clearly dresses for style, favoring darker and tighter clothes. More of a casual attire of a simple t-shirt and the occasional zip up hoodie, a pair of tight fitting jeans and simple pair of old school sneakers. The guarantees in her clothing are a studded belt and studded wristband on her left wrist.[/style] [style=margin-top: -20px; height: 20px; border-bottom: 2px dotted #1C1C1C; font-family: georgia; font-style: italic; font-size: 20px; letter-spacing: 2px; color: #47314D; text-shadow: #000000 1px 1px 2px; text-align:right; text-transform: lowercase]history[/style][style=border: 1px solid #1C1C1C; background-color: #0C010F; font-size: 10px; text-align: justify; padding: 3px; color: 706673; overflow: auto; height: 80px;]✄-- Aimi Shimura, born a relatively normal girl into a normal life, atleast for her early childhood years. A small speed bump in the young girl's life with her Mother passing away to illness. She still young yet old enough to grasp the general depth to what had happened. This of course impacted her life greatly as she was left alone with her Father who seemed to only grow distant from his daughter. She had no way of knowing the mindset of her Father who was constantly reminded by looking into the young Aimi's face of his late wife. The distance which was driven between them was first met with awkwardness, then sorrow. Though as the years went by, it slowly began to turn into anger, resentment and hatred on the part of Aimi. She left to feel as if she was alone in the world, to fend for herself because from her perspective, her Father wanted nothing to do with her. As fate would have it, Aimi's powers began to mature, first as a surprise to her as her parents had never alerted her to this, her Mother passing as she was young and the already mentioned distance between her and her Father. First met with fear, it quickly turned to anger as the young woman rationalized that it was something her Father must have done to her. This ultimately led to her attacking him, trying to use that power of hers, only to fail. Rather then being met with anger however, her Father only seemed to hug her as he managed to restrain her. Something which would have been unwise had she more mastery over what she had been given by him. From this point on, he vowed to teach her himself to better understand what she was, what she has. Finally taking an interest in her, yet it was far too late for that for Aimi. She couldn't forgive him, not now, there was no way he could do this now. She did humor him though in taking in what he had to teach her so as one day she could take what she would call revenge for those neglected years, for who she was. As the rite of passage if one will, at the age of 15, she was sent to the Academy, to where she began to develop more and more, and be quite a trouble maker.[/style] [style=margin-top: -20px; height: 20px; border-bottom: 2px dotted #1C1C1C; font-family: georgia; font-style: italic; font-size: 20px; letter-spacing: 2px; color: #47314D; text-shadow: #000000 1px 1px 2px; text-align: left; text-transform: lowercase]behind the mask[/style][style=border: 1px solid #1C1C1C; background-color: #0C010F; font-size: 10px; text-align: justify; padding: 3px; color: 706673; overflow: auto; height: 80px;]✄-- CBOX ALIAS: Kisaragi ✄-- ROLE PLAY YEARS: About Seven ✄-- OTHER CHARACTERS: N/A [/style]

[Amaya Shimazu]

[atrb=border,0,true][atrb=valign,top][atrb=style,background: url(http://i56.tinypic.com/2583ujl.png); width: 400px; padding: 10px; border: #0c0c0c solid 15px;][style=background: #0a0a0a; border-bottom: #0a0a0a solid 6px; line-height: 10px; font-family: georgia; letter-spacing: -2px; font-size: 25px; color: #753c78; text-align: right; font-style: italic; padding-right: 10px; margin-bottom: 10px;]aimi's review: some small things first~[/style][style=border: #222222 solid 5px;][style=background: #1a1a1a; border-left: #201721 solid 5px; padding: 5px; color: #767676;]Gahh, sorry for the late review. >m<; OVERVIEW  MAIN ATTACK POWER Does she use a weapon? It didn't say that she doesn't use one, so I merely ask. But if so or if not, include it here. LOVE LIFE You only have two sentences worth of insight here; I insist that you expand some more. TALENTS/HOBBIES Eh, just list a few more here. She has to have more than two key hobbies or talents. INSTRUMENTAL Agreeable c; But considering Shunojiski is lenient towards the arts, I'd at least think about throwing one in here, even if she isn't all that serious about learning it. FACE CLAIM  - PERSONALITY I don't really have much to say about this--as in, I think it's almost fine as it is. xD However, her 'Charismatic' trait seems to be somewhat of an outlier here. Charisma is typically found in your 'leader' types, those who surround themselves with people, etc., etc.; just overall open and charming personalities. Considering that Aimi is 'cold' and 'doesn't work well in groups' she seems to have a conflict within these traits. Normally, if one is charismatic, then he/she is, more often than not, a 'people person'. Please clarify this aspect. APPEARANCE Nice, to the point, and met the benchmark. c: HISTORY I'm glad that you explained the thing with her father, and rather well, too. :3 However it does seem a little too focused on that. Could you possibly include how her childhood was, say, outside of her home?--with other children for instance. Also add a predicament or just a simple recount of how handling her power was when she first discovered it(you could also include the situation in which she did discover it). It's very uncommon for a Subhuman to not have an encounter with at least one Manor; add some type of run-in with one or however you wish to do it. Also, it's been two years since she started attending the Academy, so I would expand a little more on her school life and reputation. SYNTAX I noticed that some words were randomly capitalized in a sentence, but it is near the beginning, so I am assuming that it was the start, but you then added something before it. Just mind this, please. c: There were also a few instances where a semicolon would have been needed, but a comma was used instead(though I didn't spot too many of these). But the biggest problem I saw in your writing was basically fragmented and run-on sentences, so be sure to read through your work after you're done or as you go and watch out for these. It's proper to not capitalize a title such as 'mother' and 'father' after a possessive pronoun, as in 'her', as it indicates the person as an object, per se, and not a name as it would be used in any other instance. I don't like pointing these things out(especially because it's so nitpicky of me to do >n<) but it's always good to know, regardless. You don't have to go in and fix these things unless you want to, but exercise this in future things, please. c: Respond in the notification thread when you are done editing Aimi's bio and I'll re-review her~ [/style][/style]