Radley, Konan

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[atrb=width,430px,true][atrb=border,0,true][atrb=style,border: 5px solid #000000; background-color: #09030A; padding: 5px][style=padding-top: 4px; border-bottom: 4px #1C1C1C solid; font-family: georgia; font-style: italic; font-size: 29px; letter-spacing:-2px; color: #47314D; text-shadow:#000000 1px 1px 2px; text-align: left; text-transform: lowercase] ✧ Konan Radley[/style][style=background-color:#161612; border: 4px solid #1C1C1C; float: right; height: 100px; width: 100px][/style] [style=margin-top: -21px; width: 286px; background-color: #0C010F; border: 1px solid #1C1C1C; padding: 3px; font-size: 10px; color: 706673;]✄-- SUB-RACE: 1/2 sub 1/2 manor. ✄-- AGE: 19. ✄-- BIRTH DATE: Dec 20. ✄-- SEXUALITY: straight ✄-- OCCUPATION: student[/style] [style=margin-top: -20px; height: 20px; border-bottom: 2px dotted #1C1C1C; font-family: georgia; font-style: italic; font-size: 20px; letter-spacing: 2px; color:#47314D; text-shadow: #000000 1px 1px 2px; text-align: left; text-transform: lowercase]overview[/style][style=border: 1px solid #1C1C1C; background-color: #0C010F; font-size: 10px; text-align: justify; padding: 3px; color: 706673]✄-- BIRTH POWER: Elemental. ✄-- SUB-TYPE: Water. ✄-- POWER LEVEL: Level I. ✄-- MAIN ATTACK POWER: Konan attacks are head on if the enemy sees him before he has a chance to ambush him or her. When he is going to attack and the enemy/target hasn't seen him, he will hide. His stealth is very effective, he blends quite nicely in dark spaces or if he is an area filled with vegetation, for example a forest, he uses his power to create mist and blind the enemy. If he is taken by surprise, ambushed, or attacked head on, he does so too. Even though there is water everywhere, he can't always gather a large enough amount to create long distance attacks like whips or waves to drown the enemy, when this happens he uses his knives. He carries all sorts of conceivable knives, from kunais to thick hunting daggers. A thick coat of frozen water gives them a more dangerous edge. These he uses for close combat and throws them occasionally. ✄-- ADDITIONAL POWERS: n/a. ✄-- LOVE LIFE: Konan has never dated anyone seriously, his mistrust in people does not help in his love life at all. He dated a few girls during his first years at the academy, but he never trusted them entirely or desired to create any deep bonds with them because that would be a huge set back in his future plans. He hopes to someday find that one that he can trust, but in the meantime he focuses on his goals. ✄-- TALENTS/HOBBIES: ►He likes to do sports and have a good physical condition. Even if he is not participating in any sport's team he makes time to run or practice some kind of martial arts. ►Likes to learn languages, is fluent in some, in others he just knows the basics. ►A good marksman. Mostly with knives and daggers he has an excellent eye, with other weapons like guns and crossbows he has to first feel comfortable with the weapon before before hitting bulls-eye. ►Good swimmer and he is always drinking water. ►Spying on manors ►Being stealthy ✄-- INSTRUMENTAL: Knows a little piano. A decent player, but instruments are not something he is looking forward to invest his time in. While in the academy on of the girls he dated taught him the basics and he learned the rest by himself. ✄-- FACE CLAIM: Luka Crosszeria from Uragiri wa Boku no Namae o Shitteiru.[/style] [style=margin-top: -20px; height: 20px; border-bottom: 2px dotted #1C1C1C; font-family: georgia; font-style: italic; font-size: 20px; letter-spacing: 2px; color: #47314D; text-shadow:#000000 1px 1px 2px; text-align: right; text-transform: lowercase]personality[/style][style=border:1px solid #1C1C1C; background-color: #0C010F; font-size:10px; text-align: justify; padding: 3px; color: 706673; overflow: auto; height: 80px;]✄-- Konan always has something in his mind. Whether it's training, planning where to jog the next morning or what manor to spy on. Some would think he gets distracted or has ADD, but when they get to know him they understand that he has a busy mind. He doesn't like to waste time so if he is doing something that does not require his full attention he uses the time to plot. He agreed to spend the two extra years at the academy to perfect his powers and to do some digging of his own. He is bent on joining the A'lyre, but first he must finish some business of his own. If he cant find his father on his own-- a manor that was falsely accused of raping his mother -- he will try to join the Manor Hunters even though he is half a manor himself. His heritage is a sensitive subject. Few know of his manor genetic, only his family so far. Since young he held a grudge against the manor that abandoned his mother, the father that had passed on to him the curse of Satan's soldiers. His mother, knowing that he had manor abilities, willingly gave him her power and her dark secret. She hadn't been dumped, but deceived. When she told her boyfriend (during her time at the academy) that she was pregnant, he confessed that he was a manor. Knowing that this would cause a turmoil too cruel for them, she let him escape from the academy and never saw him again. This made Konan become incredible suspicious of everyone and distrustful. His mother committed suicide shortly after passing on her power to him. Alone and heartbroken, Konan swore to find his father and make him pay for his mistakes. He is still indecisive if he will kill him, he will definitively expose him and give him a good torture. Konan is incredible focused on polishing his powers and being careful to not trust anyone. As for his alliance. Being a hybrid of subhuman and manor comes with huge setbacks, he knows that no side would truly accept him, and he accepts that. So he wont truly accept anyone either. He uses people to get what he needs, being with the subhumans has proven to be productive, he get closer to the manors and can dispose of them. Goals: ►Find his father and probably kill him ►Join the A'lyre if they can help him find his father, without them knowing his true intentions Strengths: ►Manipulating water into the ice stage ►Lasting stamina thanks to all the exercise he does ►Being stealthy ►Handling knives ►Lying, his existence pretty much depends in that Weaknesses: ►Interacting honestly with others ► Maintaining relationships ►Has nightmares about his mother ►Feels that he is doomed to roam the earth alone ►Fire elementals Likes: ►Loads of water, either to drink or use ►Feeling exhausted with exercise ►Napping on grass ►Smart people ►Smoking and having the occasional drink Dislikes: ►Being so distrustful of others ►Relying on others ►Not knowing who his father is ►Idiotic people ►Strawberry ice cream Fears: ►Spiders ►Dying without accomplishing his goals ►Being betrayed[/style] [style=margin-top: -20px; height: 20px; border-bottom: 2px dotted #1C1C1C; font-family: georgia; font-style: italic; font-size: 20px; letter-spacing: 2px; color: #47314D; text-shadow: #000000 1px 1px 2px; text-align: left; text-transform:lowercase]appearance[/style][style=border: 1px solid #1C1C1C; background-color: #0C010F; font-size: 10px; text-align: justify; padding: 3px; color: 706673; overflow: auto; height: 80px;]✄-- Body► Thin, but well toned Height► 6'5 Hair► Black, with straight layers, On the back it covers the whole length of his neck , bangs reaching to his nose. Eyes► Narrow, grey color Clothes and other traits► Two earrings are clipped on his left ear, one on the top curve and the other almost at the base. He likes to wear button down shirts and worn out jeans. He also wears thick bracelets. He usually only wears dark colors or white. Nothing that would make him stand out. He also never leaves without a jacket or long coat to conceal his knives or a flask with water or liquor. Tatu: Two large red X's on the side of his left arm.[/style] [style=margin-top: -20px; height: 20px; border-bottom: 2px dotted #1C1C1C; font-family: georgia; font-style: italic; font-size: 20px; letter-spacing: 2px; color: #47314D; text-shadow: #000000 1px 1px 2px; text-align:right; text-transform: lowercase]history[/style][style=border: 1px solid #1C1C1C; background-color: #0C010F; font-size: 10px; text-align: justify; padding: 3px; color: 706673; overflow: auto; height: 80px;]✄--Konan Radley was born on December 20th, nineteen years ago. His grandfather was a british man that moved to Japan to attend the academy as a subhuman. He married a japanese woman. Konan's mother, Amamiya Radley got pregnant when she was 18, and gave birth to a half subhuman half manor son. His grandparents took care of both him and his mother, feeling sorry for the misfortune that befell their daughter. They kept her 'indiscretion' a secret from others, telling that his father had been killed by manors before he was born. When Konan turned 12, his mother told him the truth: she hadn't been abandoned by her boyfriend, but she hadn't known his father was a manor until she was pregnant. Amamiya let his father run and hide so that he wouldn't be hunted by subhumans due to the pregnancy and she made up the abandonment tale. She had actually loved his father and had wanted to protect both her son and love. She told Konan to steal her power, he was old enough to understand that his life depended in that everyone believed that he was a subhuman. The day after she gave him her power, she killed herself. She had done so to protect him once again, if people knew that he had sucked her power, subhumans would despise him. No one should've known that she had no more powers. His mother's suicide devastated Konan. He was heartbroken and swore to find his father, make him pay, and to never trust anyone else. He didn't want to end up like his mother, betrayed and destroyed. His grandparents paid for his education at the academy. He graduated but stayed for the extra two years to perfect his abilities and become a fearsome warrior. That was half the truth. He also wanted to investigate. He needs to infiltrate the Manor Hunters to track down his real father. After he does this, he will disappear for ever. For he knows that if anyone knows the truth about what he is, he will be hunted by everyone. He does not believe that anyone will accept him.[/style] [style=margin-top: -20px; height: 20px; border-bottom: 2px dotted #1C1C1C; font-family: georgia; font-style: italic; font-size: 20px; letter-spacing: 2px; color: #47314D; text-shadow: #000000 1px 1px 2px; text-align: left; text-transform: lowercase]behind the mask[/style][style=border: 1px solid #1C1C1C; background-color: #0C010F; font-size: 10px; text-align: justify; padding: 3px; color: 706673; overflow: auto; height: 80px;]✄-- CBOX ALIAS: Alex. ✄-- ROLE PLAY YEARS: Six. ✄-- OTHER CHARACTERS: N/a. [/style]

[Amaya Shimazu]

[atrb=border,0,true][atrb=valign,top][atrb=style,background: url(http://i56.tinypic.com/2583ujl.png); width: 400px; padding: 10px; border: #0c0c0c solid 15px;][style=background: #0a0a0a; border-bottom: #0a0a0a solid 6px; letter-spacing: -2px; font: 45px wire one; color: #2C264A; text-align: right; margin-bottom: 10px; padding: 5px; line-height: 10px;]konan's review: not quite.. :/[/style][style=border: #222222 solid 5px;][style=background: #1a1a1a; border-left: #272730 solid 5px; padding: 5px; color: #767676;]Wahh, a little late review, sorryy D: But.. I formally welcome you to Shuno~ :D OVERVIEW  MAIN ATTACK POWER No problem here, and I'm pleased you put some length in it~ I'm also appreciative of the fact that you stated the crippled aspects of his power; crippled due to his low level, and it's not something most members include in their bios. :3 LOVE LIFE Nice, brief summary~ :3 TALENTS/HOBBIES  - INSTRUMENTAL  - FACE CLAIM  - PERSONALITY I believe this is adequate, although clarifying a few vague bits in there would be good, considering that a good chunk of this portion is where you practically repeated what the character's history says. APPEARANCE Normally members don't go the route of listing things like you did, but as mentioned in the biography walkthrough, which I'm assuming you read, you'll know that this method is fine also. However, you have fallen terribly short of meeting this field. Aside for the "Clothes" section, there isn't one complete sentence here. The body itself should be a good paragraph; that run-on line you have in "Hair" isn't done properly for me to simply let it go; and surely you can add more than three words for the "Eyes" section. Disregarding the "Height" and "Clothes", I expect at least two to three more sentences on each line just to meet an average standard. HISTORY The beginning of his history is regrettably short. There is no insight whatsoever of how his childhood was like, which is still a significant portion of his life. Please include something of the sort here; for example, did he interact with other kids his age (if not, simply state so in the history)? Another mishap about this small detail from the top. Shunojiski isn't in Japan. It's in a different realm of existence as opposed to Earth (albeit similar to Japan, yes), which you should have read about in the Plot. The extra two years at the Academy is conditional on that the student intends on taking up some type of governmental (or teaching) occupation. Does he have any intention of taking up such a career? Otherwise, I don't think the option of the extra two years is available. You can learn more about these occupations here. The latter portion of the history is fine, though I have the need to point out that if he intends on seeking out the A'lyré for assistance, one should hope that he has a lead on who they are, considering exceedingly few actually know the identities of those that are apart of the group. SYNTAX I spotted several possessive mishaps, where you left out the "'s" (or just the apostrophe itself) on nouns and such. Next that I will point out is the nationality blunders here, where you didn't capitalize "British" nor "Japanese." These are cultures, and therefore are required to be capitalized. c: This tidbit also includes the capitalization of "Manors," "Subhumans," and the like, as these are types of people. Throughout the application, I saw some fragmented sentences (most of which where transitional phrases that you ended with a period instead, and started the next sentence); please be mindful of these. He's a different type of character, I'll give you that. c: But a little more effort wherein I mentioned would be appreciated. [STYLE=text-align: center; font: 14px raleway; letter-spacing: 2px; background: #0c0c0c; padding: 1px 3px 2px 3px; margin-top: 2px;]application walkthrough - notification thread[/style][/style][/style]